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Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:35 pm
by tumblingdice
How about this?
Elder Dwellers of the Forbidden B/X Basement
Eagerly exploring the esoteric Lands and Environs of the D&D Wilderness. When we have time.
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:41 pm
by badams30
tumblingdice wrote: ↑Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:35 pm
How about this?
Elder Dwellers of the Forbidden B/X Basement
Eagerly exploring the esoteric Lands and Environs of the D&D Wilderness. When we have time.
GOLD.
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:47 pm
by tumblingdice
The English major in me is starting to bristle at the amount of adjectives and adverbs piling up here. Will shorten to:
Dwellers of the Forbidden B/X Basement
Exploring the esoteric Lands and Environs of the D&D Wilderness. When we have time.
I have to interview an applicant via Zoom for a part-time position here at the library, so I need to go act like an (ostensibly) responsible adult for the rest of the day. I'll let the discussion continue while I'm away, and then make an executive decision tonight.
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:50 pm
by greyarea
We have a winner!
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 7:56 pm
by connivingsumo
greyarea wrote: ↑Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:50 pm
We have a winner!
Chicken Dinner!
*kinda butt-hurt my 'Esoteric' didn't make the cut!
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 7:59 pm
by mythictom
connivingsumo wrote: ↑Thu Jun 03, 2021 7:56 pm
greyarea wrote: ↑Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:50 pm
We have a winner!
Chicken Dinner!
*kinda butt-hurt my 'Esoteric' didn't make the cut!
Too highbrow!
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 8:13 pm
by tumblingdice
connivingsumo wrote: ↑Thu Jun 03, 2021 7:56 pm
greyarea wrote: ↑Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:50 pm
We have a winner!
Chicken Dinner!
*kinda butt-hurt my 'Esoteric' didn't make the cut!
Look at the second line.
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 8:23 pm
by greyarea
tumblingdice wrote: ↑Thu Jun 03, 2021 5:47 pm
The English major in me is starting to bristle at the amount of adjectives and adverbs piling up here.
Needs passive voice.
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 8:29 pm
by tumblingdice
The passive voice is needed? Is that what was said by you?
Re: Old-fashioned dungeon crawl, anyone?
Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2021 8:38 pm
by greyarea
Overbearlingly judgmental English majors are driven exceedingly crazy by excessive use of unnecessary adverbs, redundant and surplus adjectives, and the passive voice.